高分作文策略-如何寫好英語作文句子

高分作文策略-如何寫好英語作文句子

高考英語書面表達新的評分標準中提倡使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高詞匯。而以前高考書面表達評分主要是根據(jù)要點和語言準確程度而定，因此考生在書面表達時，也只注重不遺漏要點和正確使用語言知識（如謂語的時態(tài)、名詞單復(fù)數(shù)等）這兩個方面，很少考慮或根本不考慮“使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高詞匯”，導致最后寫出來的東西千篇一律，缺乏生氣，影響了自己的成績。
那么，考生怎樣才能在書面表達中避免語句表達單一化，寫出好的句子來呢？本文擬結(jié)合新的評分標準，對學生書面表達中的一些語句作一分析，并提出一些寫作建議，以幫助考生寫出豐富多彩的句子出來，提高自己的書面表達能力。
一、要適當?shù)囟嗍褂靡恍┰~組、習語來代替一些單詞，以增加文采，豐富語句的表現(xiàn)力。如：
【原文】She doesn’t like sports.
【修正】She cares nothing for sports.
【原文】A new railway is being built in my hometown.
【修正】A new railway is under construction in my hometown.
   英語習語、詞組十分豐富，考生在自己的書面表達中，能適當?shù)厥褂眠@些短語，無疑是一個提高水平的十分行之有效的方法。
二、盡量避免過多地重復(fù)使用的某一單詞，必要時應(yīng)選擇使用其它恰當?shù)耐�義詞或詞組來代替。如：
【原文】I like reading while my brother likes watching television.
【修正】I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.
【原文】We’ve built a new classroom building besides the old one and we’ve also built a library where the old playground used to be.
【修正】We’ve built a new classroom building besides the old one and we’ve also set up a library where the old playground used to be.
三、注意使用不同結(jié)構(gòu)、不同長度的句子，盡量使句型多樣化，避免單調(diào)。如：
【原文】There is a new classroom building on one side of the road. There used to be a playground on the other side before. But there is a library now. There are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines in the library. There is a new playground in front of the school. There are a lot of trees in and around the school.
【修正】On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, where the playground used to be, now stands another new building — our library, in which you can find all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in front of the school. We have also planted a lot of trees in and around the school.
原文在語法上并沒有什么錯誤，但由于通篇過多地使用了there be 結(jié)構(gòu)，不但使得表達的內(nèi)容顯得單調(diào)乏味，而且還給閱卷老師一種“不成熟”的感覺。我們可通過轉(zhuǎn)換句式來避免句子結(jié)構(gòu)的單一化。同一個意思，可使用不同的表達方法，這樣做既可以突出重點，又能豐富表達，增加文采。
四、多使用一些主從復(fù)合句來代替簡單句，可使書面表達行文更加豐富多彩。如：
【原文】We had to go home.
【修正】All we could do was to go home.
【原文】The meal was very nice. We all enjoyed it very much.
【修正】The meal was so nice that we all enjoyed it very much.
【原文】I studied Chinese, maths, English, physics, chemistry and computer at school.
【修正】The main subjects I studied at school included Chinese, maths, English, physics, chemistry and computer.
五、改變句子開頭方式，不要一味地都是主語開頭，接著是謂語、賓語，最后再在句末加上一個狀語。我們可以適當?shù)匕岩恍┏煞郑ㄈ鐮钫Z）提前位于句子的開頭，使整個句子讀起來有點跌宕起伏，增加書面表達的表現(xiàn)力。
【原文】We met at the school gate and went there together early in the morning.
【修正】Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together.
【原文】The young man pointed to a policeman not far away and said, “He stopped us an hour ago and told us to catch another offender.”
【修正】Pointing to a policeman not far away, the young man explained, “He stopped us an hour ago and made us catch another offender.”
六、通過合句，將意義相關(guān)的幾個句子用一定的連接方式連接起來，或通過緊縮，去掉一些多余的成分，避免冗長累贅、松散無力，以增強句子的連貫性，達到更好的表達效果。如：
【原文】We had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced. Some told stories. Some played chess.
【修正】After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing, telling jokes and playing chess.
原文并沒有明顯的語法錯誤，但讀上去不夠簡潔，顯得羅嗦�？砂言�若干簡單句合并成帶有一個共同主語的句子。又如：
【原文】Now Zhang Ge Zhuang Primary School has three teachers. They teach 48 pupils.
【修正】Now Zhang Ge Zhuang Primary School has three teachers, teaching 48 pupils.
【原文】My brother was riding the bike and I sat on the seat behind him.
【修正】My brother was riding the bike with me sitting on the seat behind.
七、在整篇文章眾多的主謂賓句子結(jié)構(gòu)中，可適當?shù)卮蚱瞥Ｒ?guī)，用一些倒裝句、強調(diào)句或感嘆句，為意思的表達增添一點新意。
【原句】My parents praised the dog warmly. It had saved my little sister bravely.
【修正】My parents praised the dog warmly. It was our brave dog who had saved my little sister.
【原句】The head of the farm showed us around. We were glad to see the crops and vegetables growing very well.
【修正】The head of the farm showed us around. How glad we were to see the crops and vegetables growing so well.(范文先生網(wǎng) www.panasonaic.com)
八、連接成分起著承上啟下的作用，是語義關(guān)系過渡的橋梁。有效地使用語句間的連接成分，可使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次清楚，過渡自然。如：
【原文】On the morning of February 8, 2000, at 7:15, I was on my way along Park Road towards the east. I saw an old man come out of the City Park. A yellow car drove up Third Street. It suddenly turned right. It hit the old man. He fell down with a cry. The car didn’t stop to save the old man. It ran away quickly.
【修正】The accident happened at 7:15 on the morning of February 8, 2000. I was walking along Park Road towards the east when an elderly man came out of the park on the opposite side of the street. Then I saw a yellow car drive up Third Street and make a sudden right turn into Park Road. The next moment the car hit the old man. He fell down with a cry. But the car didn’t stop to save the old man. Instead，it drove off at great speed.
     原文顯得支離破碎、層次不明，通過運用一些連接成分或過渡詞后，原結(jié)構(gòu)松散的句子就有機地結(jié)合起來，變得上下連貫，渾然一體了。
    最后，我們還要提醒考生，在使用比較復(fù)雜的句型和結(jié)構(gòu)時，一定要注意分寸，應(yīng)根據(jù)書面表達的內(nèi)容和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)而定，千萬不要弄巧成拙。

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